I have seen ..
I have seen hope..
dying and rising again as the phoenix
flowing in the veins with blood
and shining from the eyes.
I have seen desperation..
entering in the head
fighting with conscience
and begging to die...
I have seen sympathy..
coming from all around
making you feel debilitated.
without telling why..
I have seen the world..
as an enemy, as a friend.
changing its face with the time
but keeping you alive..
and..
I have seen pride..
keeping its head always high
its meeting with innocence
and melting down through the eyes..
dying and rising again as the phoenix
flowing in the veins with blood
and shining from the eyes.
I have seen desperation..
entering in the head
fighting with conscience
and begging to die...
I have seen sympathy..
coming from all around
making you feel debilitated.
without telling why..
I have seen the world..
as an enemy, as a friend.
changing its face with the time
but keeping you alive..
and..
I have seen pride..
keeping its head always high
its meeting with innocence
and melting down through the eyes..
posted by saurabh at 8:50 AM
8 Comments:
Wow... last para was really thoughtful... innocence melting the pride...
sahi suru
atlast yeh poem bhi public ho hi gaya.
I have seen u thru all these phases :D
last paragraph was not making much sense to me.. but there was something in it which was pulling me in.
and in the end a good poem/post
(grin)...(clap)...itte dino mein pehli baar kuch mast likha hai. And the best part was, instead of dragging the poem as people usually do thinking epic wins them accolades, you kept it short and thoughtful. Lovely one bro, keep going!!
@bhaggu
yeah.. innocence can really melt the greatest pride
@voice
haan..bas yahi bacha tha public karne ko.. so kar diye..soche kam se kam safe rahega
last para is not that diff to imagine.. think abt it..or i wud tell ya later
@ Rashmi
thnx for showering this much praise. .. and i kept it short coz i cudnt write more .. :))
thnx ya all for commenting
suru/khabru
Nice piece..
Really really nice.. achingly beautiful, yeah!
But...
I am not convinced that innocence can melt greatest pride...
Revise this idea my friend, Perhaps this is the reason behind the origin of this poem...
Don't ever think that innocence can melt greatest pride. Pride never melts, I have seen it personally..
@I have seen desperation..
Entering in the head
fighting with conscience
and begging to die..
Very true.. Desperation is alive only when it is in heart, once you start discussing the practicality of desperation, your mind, your logics, & your compromising attitude kill it..
Nicely written.. Congrats!
Now u have surprised me...
I always saw such a sweet n thoughtful idea coming from ur mind but cud never imagine that u can put it so beautifully into words n that too with use of very gd literatire words...
especially the narrationn follow up of poem made me sure that ur really an artist u just need to expose urself more...
keep it up...
@hrishu
i didnt say innocence melts the pride always.. i just said it CAN melt it.. and beleive me.. it can.. depends on situations... i have experienced it too..
@avi
itna barai karega to phul jayenge...
tu kahi mera maar to nahi raha hai :)
neways
thnx ya all for commenting
suru
simply B-E-A-utiful :D
especially the last part.
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